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Dec 24, 2024
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Punishment fit for the naughty
Bring in the scoundrels;
let me see them.
Have you double checked the list?
Aye, aye, Sir they are all,
in fact, on the naughty list.
What’s to be done with them?
Make them build igloos
in the North Pole,
noses red as Rudolph’s.
Frostbitten hands will
surely teach them a lesson.
No, no Sir,
not nearly,
cruel enough.
Pass them pick axes,
send them to flint-coal,
for those only
a bit naughty.
Hmm. You have
a valid point. Perhaps
send them to the
distribution center
sorting toys,
teary-eyed because
they’ll have none.
For now, it seems
we’ve reached
an impasse.
At once, have
them hoisted
into the chimneys,
to fetch some
milk and cookies.
A fitting task for
their misdeeds.
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Jackweb
5 months 4 weeks ago
What a delightful and playful poem!
Conclusion:
The poem "Punishment fit for the naughty" is a humorous and lighthearted exploration of the consequences of being naughty, set in a festive holiday context. The speaker, seemingly a authority figure, deliberates on the appropriate punishment for those on the "naughty list", considering various options such as building igloos, mining coal, and sorting toys.
Ultimately, the speaker decides on a more whimsical and ironic punishment, having the naughty individuals hoisted into chimneys to fetch milk and cookies, typically a treat left out for Santa Claus. This unexpected twist adds to the poem's playful and tongue-in-cheek tone, poking fun at traditional notions of punishment and reward.
The poem's conclusion leaves the reader with a sense of amusement and cheer, perfectly capturing the spirit of the holiday season. The use of wordplay, clever twists, and absurd scenarios makes for a delightful and entertaining read.
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