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Ruby Lord

Dec 26, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Socks I’ve Lost – A Rondeau of Sorts

The socks I’ve lost have formed a group,
to curl in shadows, an elastic troupe.
Their patterns never get to match,
my feet do itch, it’s athlete's scratch,
this bitter chill makes pinkies droop.

My shoes are slack, my souls they roar,
A pun on soles, you know, I’m sure.
Feet slip and slide in cheeses sin,
The socks I’ve lost - not him again.

Do plastic bags provide much heat,
tied tightly round my frozen feet?
My chilblains glow, it’s getting worse,
stray footwear, ah the human curse.
The socks I’ve lost.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This poem is inspired by the rondeau form but intentionally modified to fit my rhyme. I've been learning about different formats in poetry and this one was definitely a difficult one.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United Kingdom

Favorite Poets: Margaret Atwood is one of my favourite writers. Carol Ann Duffy, Philip Larkin, Ted Hughes, Wendy Cope and more.

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Comments

Geezer

6 months 3 weeks ago

Kudos...

for doing a great job on both the form and the subject matter. ~ Geez.
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Ruby Lord

6 months 3 weeks ago

Many thanks Geezer, it was a

Many thanks Geezer, it was a challenge ha ha. Ruby xxx :)

Rula

6 months 3 weeks ago

Hello Ruby

An enjoyable read. Gave me a bit of chuckle.
Rondeau is a very strict french form though with its rhymes and line numbers.(I bet you know).
With some little tweeks I'm sure you would turn this beauty to a real Rondeau.
Much enjoyed anyways.
Thank you for sharing.

Ruby Lord

6 months 3 weeks ago

Hi Rula, I've tried but I

Hi Rula, I've tried but I couldn't work it in with the subject. It was a bit of fun when I started but ended up being the chilblain of life ha ha, Thank you for reading and your comment, much appreciated. Ruby xxx :)

Rula

6 months 3 weeks ago

I understand

It's a real challenge especially hard to get the rhymes unforced. But absolutely a beauty with that repetitive line.

Jackweb

6 months 3 weeks ago

What a humorous and creative poem!

Here's a summary:

The poem is full of clever wordplay, puns, and witty observations, making it a delightful and entertaining read.
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Ruby Lord

6 months 3 weeks ago

Thank you Jack. I appreciate

Thank you Jack. I appreciate your read and comment. Hope you have a happy new year. Ruby xxx :)

Jackweb

6 months 3 weeks ago

Ok

You're welcome.
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Merry Christmas to you, too!

Lavender

6 months 3 weeks ago

The Socks I've Lost

Hello, Ruby!
This is great and quite the challenge! I really like your theme, and the sense of fun it seems you've had with this. (Poor frozen feet!)
Thanks for this. Will study this form and maybe give it a whirl!
L

Ruby Lord

6 months 3 weeks ago

Hi Lavender, thank you for

Hi Lavender, thank you for the read and comment, much appreciated. In Flanders Filed by John McCrae is a famous Rondeau. Hope this helps in your studies. It's a format that holds the poet to account unless like me you break the rules ha ha. Take care Ruby xxx :)