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Dec 28, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

This poem is part of the contest:

Resurrection

From weeping skies, a fallen angel spills,
Unfurling wings, escaping heaven's hills.
Her reign once mighty in the halls of hell,
Now tears betray the sorrow she can't quell.

She cherished life, embraced each fleeting breath,
Shielding us from shadows, pain, and death.
More than mere holiness, a vibrant soul,
With boundless love that makes us whole.

No earthly cause explains the sudden blow,
The lightning's flash that brought her down below.
She gave her spirit freely, this we know,
A tapestry of starlight she would sew.

Where once we saw a fall, a sinful plight,
Now love illuminates her endless flight.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: USA the bay state, United Kingdom, Australia, South Africa, Nigeria, Canada, Europe, USA

Favorite Poets: Dylon, George Harrison, Leonard Cohen, Jess, Rett, Black Mountain Gang

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Comments

Patricia

5 months 3 weeks ago

I loved this poem.I have not seen anything like it.That showed a lot of creativity to me. Everything came to life and the pictures were deep in my mind. It's not your usual fallen angel story.I like the ending too. It felt like a resurrection must be like and I give this a 10.

mark

5 months 3 weeks ago

smiles

Thank you Patty,
Mark

Rula

5 months 3 weeks ago

Hello Mark

Always great to read you and sonnets always have a special delicious taste to them, don't they?
I'm sure you're aware that some lines need your visit as they are one or two syllables more or less, and sure you don't need me to point them up so as to make this a perfect Shakespearean sonnet.
I just wanted to say that I've been here and enjoyed the taste of this one.
BTW, I thought we should write something about Neopoet, (at least what I've been told).
Thank you for sharing my old friend!

mark

5 months 3 weeks ago

True of Shakespearean

Different schools different guides. It's why there is no rigid definition in the description. It leaves more opportunities. Also, dear, over the years so many young new writers have come to Neopoet who have pretty much dropped out to the dark side only to be lifted up by the community. That is what I tried to capture.
I hope the new year brings better times for you and yours over there Rula.
Best,
Mark

Ruby Lord

5 months 3 weeks ago

I enjoyed your sonnet and I

I enjoyed your sonnet and I think your imagery is excellent. I like the way your poem references female here. Great job. Ruby xxx :)

mark

5 months 3 weeks ago

Dear Ruby

Thank you. How to reference it was a delimma of sorts. All in all over the years I do believe more 'troubled' young ladies have come to Neopoet so I swayed to the female note although I know young men as well but I had to choose.
Have a great holiday and New Year!
Mark

Ruby Lord

5 months 3 weeks ago

My pleasure. Happy new year.

My pleasure. Happy new year. Ruby xxx :)

Triskelion

5 months 3 weeks ago

...hi Mark...

I can't remember you writing a sonnet here before. Judging from the technical merits of this one, I hope to see more from you. I enjoyed the vocabulary the most, I guess.

Thomas

mark

5 months 3 weeks ago

Thank you

Thank you Thomas and yes no fresh poetry in a long time. Medical issues and family matters took the wind out of my sails for a few years it seems. As for Sonnet I don't believe I had attempted the likes since Jess had workshops on iambics and other lineage. A blessing or a curse is my deffinition of Sonnet lol
Thanks again,
Mark