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Jan 28, 2025
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Leaves
Shaking. Trembling.
on the edge of the branch
dancing in the wind.
quickly, then slowly,
moving sensuously
in time with the motions.
So graceful.
So gentle.
They move rhythmically
in gentle waves.
Holding on tight
to the branches.
Clinging to the
trunks so strong
and sturdy.
Structures made by the beauty of nature.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I made a momentous decision today. Enough of my agony and pain and even my feelings, whatever they may be. I was looking at the leaves on the trees moving and swaying. A poem about the leaves on the trees and how they move, even when they are attached firmly to the tree branches. What do you think?
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
5 months 2 weeks ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Your poem "Leaves" beautifully captures the delicate and graceful movements of leaves in the wind. The imagery of them dancing on the edge of the branch and moving sensuously in rhythm with the wind is vivid and evocative. The repetition of words like "graceful," "gentle," and "rhythmically" enhances the flow of the poem and emphasizes the beauty of nature's creations. One suggestion for improvement could be to explore deeper emotions or themes related to the leaves' movements, perhaps delving into the transient nature of life or the interconnectedness of all living things. This could add layers of complexity to your poem and engage the reader on a more profound level.
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Rula
5 months 2 weeks ago
Hello Gogetter
a nice tribute to a mother nature's beauty.
I especially like the last line. It impacts it all.
Thank you for sharing!
The Gogetter
5 months 2 weeks ago
Gratitude to you Rula
Really appreciate that you got something from it Rula. I am attempting to expand my range of poetry writing, so expect more like this one.
Lavender
5 months 2 weeks ago
Leaves
Hello, Gogetter!
This is beautiful! Love this! I hope you enjoyed writing this as it was a pleasure to read!
Thank you!
L
The Gogetter
5 months 2 weeks ago
Big compliment coming from you L
You cannot see me smiling L. I have started to rethink the way I approach my poems. I began with this one, and have another one about a cat that visits my apartment balcony, causing me problems, as I am unable to open my window. I will drop that one online too. So happy that someone with your ability to write poems likes this!