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Michael Anthony
Michael Anthony
Feb 04, 2025 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Fallen Leaf

It lie there in my path, recently fallen
in the blustery downpour,
having served its original purpose.

Still repelling the rain, not yet succumbing to the deluge,
allows it to form small round windows on its surface
magnifying the petite patterns of the arteries.

The leaf, having discovered a new ambition,
has found another calling; beckoning me
to notice its second act of beauty.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: All we have to do is look down sometimes.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Lavender

Lavender

5 months 2 weeks ago

Fallen Leaf

Hello, Michael,
The quiet observation here is soulful. The reader just stays in the moment. I love the dainty patterns of the arteries, keeping the image of the leaf alive.
Beautiful final line. (it's should be its?)
L

I do wonder about "lie" in the opening line, and I really am not sure which is correct - lie or lies? Seems being singular, it would be "lies" but dunno...

Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

5 months 2 weeks ago

Hi Michael, I think your

Hi Michael, I think your phrasing is good and the ties between the leaf and arteries is spot on. Your first line I think contains a typo?
It lie there in my path, recently fallen
Should this be lies?
Good job, I enjoyed your poem. Ruby xx

Michael Anthony

Michael Anthony

5 months 2 weeks ago

Thanks Ruby for stopping by

Thanks Ruby for stopping by and commenting. "Lie" is an interesting and somewhat confusing word, and I have been tripped up by it more than once - lays, lie, lies, etc... Funny enough, I went back and forth with the usage here, but ultimately decided to go with one of the many definitions from good old Websters that seemed appropriate: "the position or situation in which something lies." "Lies just seemed wrong since in that context it seems as though it's a "plural" verb??? If I'm wrong here, I can see my English teacher shaking her head at me again - LOL. Not an English expert by any means, as she would agree.

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