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Feb 05, 2025
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To See Through A Broken Mirror
To see through a broken mirror,
Reminds of a life hanging on a dying cliff,
Living through perceptions, envisaging heavenly worlds,
Hanging on a thin fabric of wire, crafted from doubt and dreams chewed to shreds and satire.
To see through a broken mirror,
Is like surfing through lost ego,
Memories of love so golden,
Broken to bitter taste of fragile hate,
Cold stares of regret flushed with tears,
Accompanying swallowed pains of longing and faith.
To see through a broken mirror,
Comes with another draining kind of faith,
That even in shelters lost, hope remains,
Though carcasses smell and rot, flesh will grow again,
And a promise still flashes through gloomy eyes,
Keeping the heart shattered but still true to love.
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neopoet
4 months 2 weeks ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "To See Through A Broken Mirror" delves into themes of reflection, perception, and resilience in the face of adversity. The imagery of a broken mirror effectively conveys a sense of shattered reality and distorted self-image. The use of metaphorical language, such as "dying cliff" and "thin fabric of wire," adds depth to the portrayal of inner turmoil and struggle.
The poem effectively captures the emotional journey of grappling with loss, regret, and hope amidst brokenness. The contrast between "love so golden" and "fragile hate" creates a poignant exploration of the complexities of human experience. The repetition of the phrase "To see through a broken mirror" serves as a powerful anchor throughout the poem, reinforcing the central theme of fractured perception.
One suggestion for further enhancement could be to consider varying the rhythm or structure of the poem to create more dynamic flow. This could help to further engage the reader and enhance the overall impact of the piece. Additionally, exploring different ways to expand
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Lavender
4 months 2 weeks ago
To See Through A Broken Mirror
Hello, Sheddie,
Your words always make me pause. Here, I'm taken through so much suffering, but there is a bold, beautiful sense of hope. A heart shattered, but still pure and open to love. Hope remains.
Thank you for this,
L
Sheddie
4 months 2 weeks ago
I'm glad you found the poem
I'm glad you found the poem worthy and true.
Thank you ❤️