Cupiditas Mundi xxxv

Once my temptress
And my soul

Stitched from the one
Fabric

A harlot
With dominion

That extends
Beyond the frontiers

Of her sex

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: The Celestial River

Favorite Poets: Shane MacGowan, Dylan Thomas, Qays ibn Al-Mulawwah, Wallada bint al-Mustakfi, Rumi, Khalil Gibran, Yona Wallach, Arthur Rimbaud, Paul Eluard, Brendan Behan, James Clarence Mangan, William Blake, Tom Waits, Charles Bukowski, Forough Farrokhzad, Thomas Chatterton

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5 months 1 week ago

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Candlewitch

5 months 1 week ago

My Dear Friend,

Your title is reflective of part of your mind; logical and orderly. The language usage is inspired and pristine. the rhythm is graceful and it is not bogged down, very fluid. I much enjoyed the theme. I enjoyed this poem from start to finish, classy to be sure!

love, Cat

Dalton

5 months 1 week ago

Hi Dear Cat

Was thinking of Empress Messalina as that’s the field of my studies lately. There’s the complete cycle available to read on All Poetry and I’ll continue building on that till I’m bored. It means more than words that you enjoyed this. The title is of course Latin meaning roughly Lust of the World. I’m enjoying the historical elements though Roman myth too xxx