Lavender

Feb 20, 2025 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Cool, Cool Water

There is green, green grass
Over the wide, wide hill
We have legs to run
Like the wild, wild wind

Go, my brother!
Fly, my sister!
Let's chase the summer sun
Dream, my brother!
Sing, my sister!
Day is calling, and we are young

We have cool, cool water
And it is a hot, hot afternoon
There is shade to offer
Beneath this tall, tall tree

Come, my brother!
Join me, my sister!
Let's rest our weary minds
Sit, my brother!
Drink, my sister!
The Earth is sweet, and we are free

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Camaraderie.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.

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Comments

Candlewitch

4 months 2 weeks ago

Dear Lady Lavender,

This is like a breath of fresh fresh air... I love it!

and you! xxx Cat

Lavender

4 months 2 weeks ago

Hello, Cat,

It lifted my spirits while writing. Glad you enjoyed it!
Much love,
Lxx

Geezer

4 months 2 weeks ago

brush my spirit! What an amazing turn-around this is from your last post. I love this you. One tiny suggestion; I would change the last line of the second verse, to [ The day is calling, and we're young. ] To the voice in my head, reading aloud; it seems to flow just a tad smoother. [ I think it may be the rhyming sound of run. sun, and young]. Anyway, I love it regardless
Geez.
.

Lavender

4 months 2 weeks ago

Hello, Geezer,

It really soothed my soul while writing. So glad you felt it, too. I like your suggestion and will gratefully use it! It flows and sounds so much better!
Thank you, as always!
Lx

Geezer

4 months 2 weeks ago

As always...

my pleasure. ~ Geez.
.

Rula

4 months 2 weeks ago

Cool

as the spirit of this poem.
Amazing repetition all through
Love it!
Thank you for sharing!

Lavender

4 months 2 weeks ago

Hello, Rula,

This felt very soulful to me, seemed to nurture something I really needed. I hope it passed a bit along to you, too.
Thank you for reading! Much love through our shared poetry!
Lx

RoseBlack

4 months 2 weeks ago

A much needed

breath of fresh air. Sunshine, green grass and spring/summer air. Memories outside, enjoying life. Something desperately needed, wanted and missed. Great write!

Lavender

4 months 1 week ago

Hello, Carrie,

My soul needed a bit of peace, joy. I hope it gave you a bit, too.
Thank you for reading!
L