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Feb 21, 2025
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I'm tired
We have fleas.
I have no clue
from where (?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!).
My house is so clean.
But is life not a series of injustice?.
I'm so in love it's hard to focus on the fleas.
I'm more concerned about my outfit
About This Poem
Last Few Words: So, I'm getting married and now I suddenly have fleas. I'm kinda tired to be honest. I hope the poem conveys that
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4 months 2 weeks ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem captures a sense of exhaustion and frustration, possibly reflecting the feeling of being overwhelmed by different aspects of life. The abrupt shifts in focus from the issue of fleas to love and appearance create an interesting contrast. Consider refining the structure to enhance the flow and coherence of the poem. Clarifying the connection between the different themes could help strengthen the overall message and impact of the piece.
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