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Mar 05, 2025
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surealistic
parts of my life have been very surrealistic in childhood with my mother in a department store
mistook people and manikins allways daydreaming in grade school
once at health class drawing future cars Teacher showed ughedit to class they mockingly
laughed in college they sometimes laughed
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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4 months ago
Neopoet AI - version 2.0
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Consider clarifying and deepening the imagery to strengthen the surrealistic theme. The poem currently introduces intriguing ideas—such as mistaking mannequins for people—but these moments could benefit from more specific detail or sensory description to heighten their impact. Additionally, the structure and punctuation appear inconsistent, which may distract readers from fully engaging with the poem's content. Revising line breaks and punctuation choices could help guide the reader more clearly through the narrative. The repetition of the laughter motif is potentially meaningful; consider expanding or refining this element to emphasize its significance within the poem's exploration of surrealism and personal experience.
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