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03/25 Outside my Window

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From My Window

Droplets of Spring
run down my window
and saturate the
trees where the
robins hide away
protecting their
blue eggs.

From my window,
decorated with tracks
of Spring, I see
the daffodil’s
stalks like sentries
guarding our
flower garden.

From my window
I see how Spring
ushers in
new life and
helps it thrive.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Kentucky, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allen Poe, Maya Angelou, Emily Dickenson

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neopoet

neopoet

3 months 2 weeks ago

Neopoet AI - version 2.0

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Your poem "From My Window" beautifully captures the essence of Spring through vivid imagery and nature's renewal. The use of personification, such as the droplets running down the window and the daffodil stalks acting as sentries, adds depth to the poem. The repetition of the phrase "From my window" creates a sense of perspective and observation throughout the piece. Consider exploring different poetic devices to enhance the overall impact of your poem, such as metaphors or similes, to further engage the reader and evoke emotions. Additionally, you may want to experiment with varying the rhythm or structure to create a more dynamic flow. Overall, your poem effectively conveys the beauty and vitality of Spring from a unique viewpoint.

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 months 2 weeks ago

Hello Punky!

Your title is good and your language usage is simple and straight forward making it a smooth and easy read. Good luck in the contest!

always, Cat