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Mar 20, 2025
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Mission Call
Standing alone in my ghostly room
Wondering if some day soon-
I will be the spirit that echoes the walls
For all my friends have their mission calls
What to do
Where to go
Am I behind
None of which I know
The mirror reflects my shadowed figure
Much more raw, thinner than a picture
To spend my days to apply?
Or is it the Lord that I deny...
What to do
Where to go
My faith held still
Awaiting a sign to show-
What I am going to do now.
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
neopoet
3 months ago
Neopoet AI - version 2.0
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Mission Call" explores themes of uncertainty, self-reflection, and faith in the context of waiting for a mission call. The imagery of standing alone in a ghostly room and questioning one's purpose is evocative and sets a contemplative tone. The repetition of questions like "What to do, Where to go" effectively conveys the speaker's inner turmoil and indecision. The comparison of the mirror reflecting a "shadowed figure" emphasizes a sense of vulnerability and introspection.
One suggestion for improvement would be to further develop the emotional depth of the speaker's struggle with faith and decision-making. Exploring specific details or experiences that have led to this internal conflict could enhance the reader's understanding and connection to the speaker's journey. Additionally, considering varying the poem's structure or incorporating poetic devices like metaphor or symbolism could add layers of complexity and nuance to the themes being explored.
Overall, "Mission Call" effectively captures the uncertainty and introspection that come with waiting for a significant
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Candlewitch
3 months ago
Hello M,
some of my friends are shadow people, as am I. A questioning of faith is one of those things that should be done...to see if it holds water. It is healthy to question...I know this for a fact. I enjoyed your poem very much. It is nice to meet you, welcome to Neopoet!
always, Cat
mark
2 months 3 weeks ago
Merryn
Hello, Neopoet is a mission. Become the echoes the paintings on the walls.
What you are going to do now? Be involved in everything!
Reaally nice rhythm in this and best of luck,
Mark
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