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Apr 20, 2025
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I will stand by you
With her i will stand.
Like a tree my roots
Are unconditional to the end
My resolve is a comenment
that will not bend.
Because with her I stand
I will hold on tight.
When her darkness needs a friend
I will show her that my love will not bend
Because with in me I hope that she will find her on roots for a life of peace to begin
That my love will not bend
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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neopoet
2 months ago
Neopoet AI (Premium) - version 3.0
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Consider clarifying the poem's imagery and metaphors to strengthen coherence. The metaphor of roots and trees is promising, but it could be expanded or refined to provide clearer symbolic meaning. For instance, the phrase "my resolve is a comenment" appears to contain a typographical error or unclear wording; revising this line for clarity would enhance reader comprehension. Additionally, repetition of the phrase "my love will not bend" could be reconsidered—either by varying the wording or by strategically placing repetitions to emphasize key points without redundancy. The line "Because with in me I hope that she will find her on roots" contains grammatical errors ("with in" should be "within," and "on roots" should likely be "own roots"); careful proofreading would improve readability. Finally, consider developing the emotional context or narrative slightly more, as this would help readers connect more deeply with the poem's central relationship and theme of unwavering support.
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