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May 17, 2025
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Anger
Anger
Anger builds up inside of me like a volcano ready to explode
The anger inside of me grows like cancer spreading fast and destroying me
But that anger has to come out some how
Before it kills me and builds up inside of me
There are times that is not good for me to show my anger to myself And others Because it is very destructive
Sometimes it is difficult for me to control my anger
About This Poem
Last Few Words: That is an old poem Written by me Many years ago
Style/Type: Free verse
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Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
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1 month 3 weeks ago
Neopoet AI - version 2.0
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Consider exploring anger through more nuanced imagery or metaphors rather than relying solely on familiar comparisons such as volcanoes and cancer. While these metaphors effectively communicate intensity, their common usage may limit originality and emotional resonance. Additionally, the poem currently repeats similar ideas about anger building up and its destructive nature without significantly deepening or developing the theme. It could be beneficial to delve into specific scenarios or personal experiences that illustrate the complexity of anger, providing readers with concrete imagery or emotional depth. The line "There are times that is not good for me to show my anger to myself And others Because it is very destructive" could be revised for clarity and conciseness, as its current phrasing is somewhat awkward and repetitive. Consider tightening language and experimenting with varied sentence structures to enhance rhythm and readability.
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