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The benefit of hurt!
Follow me down
to the netherworlds.
Places that no one has
seen or known!.
A journey to hell where
you feel no pulse at all.
Your feelings have faded!
Your heart is set for a fall!
come with me and surrender.
Maybe you’ll find the truth,
of how things really exist.
Maybe that’s not conclusive,
or A complete finality.
I feel hurt, i feel pain
and anguish too!
The joy i once felt, when I was a child
has been replaced with a grimace, a frown.
Nothing seems to satisfy
I’m a goddamned deadman inside.
So take, yes take me into your arms.
There is no solace when you’re
Feeling like an inanimate ghost.
You’re always on the run
from what’s inside your head.
And There is no place to hide,
So run into the desert where
salvation might be found.
Off to some priest or priestess
who lies in wait for you!
Who’ll tell you more lies
than you can endure.
The real problem exists,
In that you’ll never die.
Your matter is eternal
You just can’t feel,
that everyone hurts!
So off to the gallows
your sentence accrued.
You’ll spend eternity inside
Your sick fucking head.
Is this the truth,
I can’t say yes or no.
It may be that mercy
will save the day!
The god which you once worshipped
Might be able pull you out this mess.
Bless you with feelings
only he can draw out!
In order to get there
You’ll have to suffer so hard.
So ride that pale horse
til’ it dies in the desert
then crawl back through
And reclaim your reward!
God will be waiting for you!
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Posting just to post!
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
1 month ago
I'm not sure...
that anyone posts just to post. I would rather believe that even when we do not know how to say it, we still have something to say. I see the helplessness and hopelessness, that persuades you to send your "messages in the bottle"; maybe another attempt, in another direction, will yield better results. I hear you! I like some of your exhortations to run off into the desert or off to some priest or priestess who will tell you more lies than you can take, and the proclamation that there are many trials to endure before you may find the answers. Keep writing of your need to be forgiven, you will find that you are. ~ Geez.
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Lavender
1 month ago
The Benefit of Hurt
I echo everything Geezer said - he said it all so well.
Please keep writing!
L
Leslie
1 month ago
Sir G and L
It'y very kind of you to say these things. You are really some of the few friends that I have left. I try hard to express myself, but memory issues hinder me. I know you both understand suffering and I'm not making excuses, but we all know that like joy suffering never ends!
Geezer
1 month ago
No excuses...
necessary! Yes, we know and understand suffering. You keep writing and we will keep reading. ~ Geez.
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Leslie
1 month ago
Sir G
In the wordss of Eric Bloom, "Burn out the day, burn out the night" you keep being a stud and I'll keep writing"!