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crypticbard
crypticbard
May 20, 2025 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

flight ready

I will not let the weight
of old winds bend
your wings any longer.
You will soar, not for escape,
but for discovery.
We will carve the sky
into new stories,
where no shadow lingers,
and no voice drags you back.
Your flight is not borrowed—
it belongs to you. So,
let fresh winds lift.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West Moreton, AUS

Favorite Poets: There is nothing quite as boring as a life completely devoid of shadows.

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neopoet

neopoet

1 month 1 week ago

Neopoet AI - version 2.0

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem beautifully captures a sense of empowerment and liberation through the imagery of flight. The metaphor of soaring through the sky to discover new stories is vivid and compelling. The idea of leaving behind old burdens and embracing one's own journey is powerful. Consider exploring the theme of freedom even further by delving into specific details or emotions related to the act of flying. Additionally, you may want to experiment with different poetic devices such as rhythm, rhyme, or metaphor to enhance the overall impact of the poem.

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Geezer

Geezer

1 month 1 week ago

The weight...

of old winds is a truly imaginative way to describe the usual situation and the reality of things changing for the better.
To rise above the fetid breeze and be carried on new, fresh winds, to greater heights; is the artist's dream. ~ Geez.
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Lavender

Lavender

1 month 1 week ago

Flight Ready

Hello, CB,
One of the most beautiful pieces I've read on Neopoet. So wonderful.
Thank you!
L

Frederick Kesner

Frederick Kesner

1 month 1 week ago

Thanks L. This is so humbling

Thanks L. This is so humbling to hear. Hundreds of poems are posted up everyday and one can never truly tell how one is doing. Your letting me know is greatly appreciated.