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the marrow of the moment
The quill of a forgotten moment,
a signature of time upon the sky,
languid white clouds drifting by,
spurs a sharp pain that wouldn't go,
strikes paper filled with imprints,
ink staining along a cracked soul.
The hand moves in quiet rebellion,
scraping against the silence left behind,
words spilling like embers from a fire
long thought extinguished but still breathing,
its warmth aching, its hunger unspent,
spreading across the page like memory unbound.
Each letter carves a reckoning,
a whispered surrender to the weight of thought,
lines bending beneath the force of absence,
threading syllables through veins of ink—
a map to loss, to longing, to all things unnamed,
etched deep into the marrow of the moment.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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1 month ago
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Frederick Kesner
1 month ago
Not surprised nor
Not surprised nor underwhelmed tbh.
Ruby Lord
1 month ago
Hi Cryptic, your poem is
Hi Cryptic, your poem is lyrical and layered, and it moves like smoke through memory and loss. Good job, Ruby xx
Frederick Kesner
1 month ago
Thanks heaps, Ruby; that is
Thanks heaps, Ruby; that is an excellent image about the smoke, most appreciated, :)
Ruby Lord
1 month ago
You're welcome, take care,
You're welcome, take care, Ruby xx
Frederick Kesner
1 month ago
You too Ruby.
You too Ruby.