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Jun 20, 2025
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The Music Stand
The music stand
sits in the corner of my apartment
in the living room zone.
It reminds me
of the importance of music
in my life.
It demonstrates
just how much I have learned.
It tells me
that I need to practise
that pesky G chord
on my ukulele.
Music came into my life
at the time that Shaya died,
at the time that I was adjusting
to live my life on my own.
I joined a group of women
all singing one song
and in different voice parts.
They were wise and sage
and helped me
by stopping me
from feeling sorry for myself.
They gave me
and still continue to,
give me lessons in life.
Music added value
to my knowledge
of classical music culture.
I learned to sing with precision
and make the right sound,
in the right way.
I learned about
the pronunciation
of consonants and vowels
and how to breathe.
I learned discipline.
Music brought joy and laughter
into my life.
Its power was overwhelming
and in a positive way.
It directed my mind and soul
to a peaceful and purposeful place.
Its very existence
in my weekly schedule
has added value to my life.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I stared at the music stand in the corner of the living room zone of the apartment, and not only does it constantly remind me that I have to practise the G chord on the ukulele, but the effect that music has had on me. It has taken over my entire life. How good is that!
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
3 months 1 week ago
Neopoet AI [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
This poem presents a sincere and clear reflection on the personal significance of music, particularly as a source of comfort and growth during a difficult period. The straightforward narrative style effectively conveys the speaker’s journey and relationship with music.
One area to consider is the poem’s structure and rhythm. The lines are mostly short and declarative, which creates a steady but somewhat prosaic cadence. Introducing more varied line lengths or employing deliberate enjambment could enhance the musicality of the poem itself, aligning form with content.
The poem’s imagery is primarily concrete and literal—the music stand, the ukulele, the singing group—grounding the emotional experience in tangible details. This is effective, but there may be room to deepen the sensory or metaphorical language to evoke the emotional nuances more vividly. For example, exploring how music “directed my mind and soul” through metaphor could strengthen the reader’s connection.
Some phrases, such as “wise and sage,” are somewhat redundant; choosing one descriptor or finding a more distinctive image might sharpen the language. Additionally, the poem could benefit from more varied diction to avoid repetition of words like “music” and “life,” which appear frequently. Synonyms or more specific references could add texture.
Overall, the poem’s strength lies in its honest voice and clear thematic focus. Refining the rhythm, imagery, and language choices could elevate the emotional resonance and poetic impact.
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Sen99
2 months 3 weeks ago
Joy of Ukulele
Music is more than notes on a score, uplifting thoughts in your poem, continue to play and write. Thanks