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Jul 06, 2025
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I will be with you My friend
I will be with you
My friend
Every single day
Supporting you daily
That is not a lie
We are both good friends
And we have
The same believes
I can't hardly believe that
Also we treat each other with respect
We never once mistreat each other
Because that would be the wrong thing to do
And we don't deserve that
We need to work on our friendship
Because I want it to last a long time
We would be lost in the world
If we didn't had each other
About This Poem
Last Few Words: That is a new poem Written by Aldo Kraas
Style/Type: Free verse
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Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
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Neopoet AI (premium) [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
The poem expresses a clear intention to affirm the value of friendship and mutual support. The language is direct and unembellished, which can create a sense of sincerity, but it also limits the poem’s emotional resonance and imagery. The repetition of phrases such as “my friend” and “every single day” emphasizes the constancy of the relationship, yet the poem relies heavily on telling rather than showing, which can reduce its impact.
There are some grammatical inconsistencies, such as “the same believes” (which should be “the same beliefs”) and “If we didn’t had each other” (which should be “If we didn’t have each other”). These errors may distract readers and detract from the poem’s message.
The poem’s structure is free verse, but the line breaks do not always contribute to rhythm or emphasis. Consider experimenting with lineation to create more tension or surprise. The poem could benefit from more concrete imagery or metaphor to evoke the depth of the friendship rather than stating it directly. For example, rather than saying “We are both good friends,” consider illustrating this through a shared experience or symbolic gesture.
Overall, the poem communicates its message clearly, but it may be strengthened by attention to language precision, imagery, and varied syntax.
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