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Jul 09, 2025
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FITTING IN
Walking around in meat suit,
stretching over my skeleton
and a ribcage to shield and
protect my organs its just
another costume. But its
just hidden like are personalitys.
Like the masks we wear on are faces.
But the true you is the soul that floats
out of your body. So who am I?
Someone to play a role to fit in and live
life the best life that I can.
I have an unique inquisitive brain.
But deep inside I'm someone else
ive just been conditioned from birth
To conform with society, with self
awareness taught from my parents
and the environment I'm surrounded in.
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
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neopoet
2 months 2 weeks ago
Neopoet AI [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
This poem explores themes of identity, conformity, and the contrast between external appearance and internal self. The metaphor of the body as a "meat suit" and "costume" effectively conveys the idea that physical form and social roles are transient and perhaps superficial. The poem's questioning tone—"Who am i?"—invites readers to consider the tension between authentic self and societal expectations.
To enhance the poem's impact, attention to form and clarity could be beneficial. The line breaks sometimes interrupt the flow in ways that can confuse meaning—for example, "When are self / dies are soul floats" seems to contain a typographical error ("are" instead of "our") and the phrasing is somewhat unclear. Revising this line for grammatical correctness and smoother rhythm would strengthen the poem.
Additionally, consistent capitalization and punctuation would help readability and emphasize key ideas. For instance, capitalizing the pronoun "I" throughout would reinforce the personal nature of the reflection. Introducing punctuation, such as commas or periods, at strategic points can clarify the poem's rhythm and meaning without sacrificing its free verse style.
Consider expanding on the "false identity" and "conditioned to conform" concepts with more vivid imagery or specific examples to deepen the emotional resonance. This could help readers connect more viscerally with the speaker's internal conflict.
Overall, the poem presents compelling existential questions and a relatable struggle with identity. Refining language precision and structural elements will allow its philosophical insights to shine more clearly.
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Geezer
2 months 2 weeks ago
Yes...
I think that the A.I. has it right, except for the expansion of concept. I understood the concept very well. ~ Geez.
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