My Last Love Poem

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:

This poem explores the theme of mortality and the enduring nature of written expression. The title, “My Last Love Poem,” sets up an expectation of romantic or emotional closure, but the poem itself shifts quickly to the context of death and legacy. The opening lines juxtapose the act of writing with the inability to do so after death, suggesting that the “last poem” is not written by the speaker, but is instead the summation of their life as represented in memorials.

The imagery of thoughts being “printed on my bereavement card” and “etched firmly upon my grave stone” is concrete and effective, grounding the abstract idea of a final message in tangible artifacts. This literalization of legacy invites reflection on how public and permanent such expressions become after death. The phrase “for everyone to read / for all time” reinforces the sense of permanence, but also raises questions about audience and intention: is the poem for the self, for loved ones, or for an anonymous public?

Formally, the poem is spare, with short lines and minimal punctuation. This simplicity mirrors the finality of the subject matter, but it also leaves emotional distance. The poem could benefit from more specificity or sensory detail to deepen the emotional resonance. For example, what might the bereavement card or gravestone actually say? Are there particular feelings or memories the speaker wishes could be conveyed?

The poem’s movement from the personal (“what I’m feeling”) to the universal (“for everyone to read”) is effective, but the transition could be made more vivid through the use of metaphor or more evocative language. As it stands, the poem is contemplative but somewhat abstract, relying on the reader’s familiarity with the conventions of memorialization.

Overall, the poem raises interesting questions about authorship, legacy, and the limits of self-expression, but it might be strengthened by incorporating more concrete imagery or by exploring the emotional stakes in greater depth.

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of authorship, is not suggesting that you did not write this piece, but that you have written something that might have been written by anyone who aspires to write something meaningful. Good question though, I might have thought the same; I think that the A.I. might have chosen to use a better term. ~ Geez.

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Please do not put too much credence  on what AI says!!! It has no gut feelings, or feelings at all so it has no idea of the emotion you are putting into your poem. I am sorry that you felt that a rewrite was called for. I like the poem for its sensitivity and warmth make it happen!

xxx Cat