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Jul 25, 2025
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Neopoet, A Renovated Quill
Scribes and bards of Neopoet
not flocking to our new banner,
they are not coming in packed droves.
Surely change is never easy
for some it is hard to dive in
to something untried and brand new.
Those who have tested the waters
bravely exploring the terrain
finding rewards in the new space.
They will sample and discover
challenges which stimulate minds,
with poems to set sail in the stream.
No doubt more poets will arrive
in time overcoming their fear.
we will greet them with giving hearts.
Come one and all, come big and small
to the renovated site
where poems and comments are welcome to alight.
* I now like the last line. thank you Michael
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I do not like the last line of this poem. I welcome suggestions from all. (problem solved in rewrite) thank you Michael and Steven written on: Candlewitch notepad on: 07-25-2025
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
2 months ago
Neopoet AI (premium) [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
This poem addresses the theme of transition within a poetry community, using the metaphor of renovation and exploration. The structure is composed of short stanzas, each advancing the narrative of change and adaptation.
The poem’s diction is straightforward, favoring clarity over ornamentation. The metaphor of "testing the waters" and "setting sail in the stream" is consistent, reinforcing the idea of embarking on a new journey. However, the poem could benefit from more vivid imagery or concrete details to evoke a stronger emotional response. Phrases such as "new banner," "new space," and "renovated site" are somewhat generic; more specific or sensory language might help ground the reader in the experience of change.
The poem’s tone is encouraging and inclusive, particularly in the final stanzas, which invite participation and emphasize community. The use of direct address ("Come one and all, come big and small") creates a welcoming atmosphere, but the rhyme in the final lines is inconsistent with the rest of the poem’s free verse, which may feel abrupt.
Lineation is functional but could be reconsidered for greater impact. For example, enjambment could be used more deliberately to create tension or emphasis. The poem’s pacing is steady, but the repetition of similar ideas (change is hard, but rewarding) may risk redundancy. Consider condensing or varying the approach to these themes.
The poem’s central metaphor of renovation and exploration is accessible, but the lack of concrete imagery and reliance on abstract language may limit its memorability. Introducing more sensory or unexpected details could strengthen the poem’s impact and help it stand out.
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Candlewitch
2 months ago
To AI,
I do not like that last line of the poem, either...I have invited suggestions for change. thank you.
Candlewitch/Cat
Unca Fez
2 months ago
For The Last Line...
What do you think of:
Come share your words with poets all.
Steve
Candlewitch
2 months ago
thank you Steven,
but that would put too many (all)'s in the poem.
love, Cat
Michael Anthony
2 months ago
Change is hard, but I'm…
Change is hard, but I'm liking the new site. Takes some time to learn to navigate, but worth it. Liked your poem too!
Maybe... "where poems and comments are welcome to alight."
Candlewitch
2 months ago
Hello Michael,
it took a little bit of exploring and experimenting, but I have come to the conclusion that I like it, too. I am a stubborn sot with a moon in Cancer that resists change. Eventually I come around on the side of improvement, lol. thanks for reading and commenting. Have a good one, Michael.
fondly, Cat
Ruby Lord
2 months ago
Hi Cat, great poem. There’s…
Hi Cat, great poem. There’s a warmth and hopefulness in this that really comes through. It feels like an open door. Thank you, Ruby.
Candlewitch
2 months ago
Sweet Ruby,
I really appreciate the supportive attitude you gift in your comments...thank you so much.
much love, Cat