some poet once wrote

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:

This poem explores intimacy through sensory and emotional experiences, emphasizing trust and connection beyond physical sight. The imagery—such as "ugly laughter," "full bellies," and "creased faces"—grounds the poem in raw, authentic moments, steering away from idealized depictions of beauty. This choice effectively conveys a sense of comfort and familiarity.

The progression from physical closeness ("sticky close sex") to tender gestures ("finding your face with my lips") and whispered communication deepens the emotional resonance. The phrase "kissing with sealed eyes" encapsulates the theme of trust and vulnerability, reinforcing the idea that true connection transcends visual perception.

The closing lines articulate the poem’s central thesis: beauty and intimacy are found in trust and presence rather than appearance. The line breaks and enjambment support a natural, flowing rhythm that mirrors the unfolding intimacy.

To enhance the poem, consider refining punctuation for clarity and impact. For example, adding commas or periods could help guide the reader’s pacing and emphasize key moments. Additionally, exploring more varied or unexpected metaphors might deepen the sensory experience without sacrificing the poem’s straightforward tone.

Overall, the poem effectively captures the nuances of intimate connection, inviting readers to reconsider conventional notions of beauty and closeness.

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Love the closing lines. Don't think you need "close" in line 5, goes without saying really.

Hello, zuella,

Love it all, especially those final two lines.

Thank you!

L