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Night Out

You put your hair up delightfully.
In that way that left me breathless.

We went to the other side of town
where the lights were drowning out the night.

Later, we watched each other close our eyes
to sleep, and you were so still,

except for your breathing.
And I took it all in, with my eyes closed.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Lavender

Lavender

3 months 3 weeks ago

Night Out

Hello,  Michael,

Wow, such a beauty. Reminds me a bit of Eric Clapton's, "You Look Wonderful Tonight."

Always so wonderful to read a poem expressing a man's purest feelings.

Excellent...

L