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Jan 01, 2026
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Should I welcome her in?
The embrace deep and dark
Leading others astray
But for me, hits the mark
Her expression stays sullen
An indulgence in death
In the quiet of chaos
Till her very last breath
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
John Leslie O'Kelley
3 months 3 weeks ago
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I liked this one a lot! You have great talent, keep writing I'd like to hear more!
Flower Girl
3 months 2 weeks ago
John
Thank you for the kind words
Geezer
3 months 3 weeks ago
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indulgence of death. "Till her very last breath." It seems to me, that you have rejected her; "Death." That you have flirted with her and choose to stay here, with us. I too, think you have talent. Keep writing. ~ Geezer.
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John Leslie O'Kelley
3 months 2 weeks ago
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I really enjoyed this poem, but I didn't quite understand until Sir G. explained it I took it a different way.