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Jan 01, 2026
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The art of being!
Hauntingly,
the music
allows me.
to keep my
rhythm
in life!
The tempo
and pace,
that I move,
are always
something I fight.
When I want to
give in to my anger,
I try to push
it out of
my sight.
Nothing can stop
a free mind,
from being
the things
that he or she likes!
About This Poem
Last Few Words: We all have something that moves us, out into the night of our lives. Music for me is that something, that always carries a fresh look at life. The themes and motifs of lyric, will surely allow me to fight, the pressure produced here in life.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
neopoet
3 months 3 weeks ago
Neopoet AI (premium) [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
This poem explores the relationship between music, emotion, and personal freedom. The opening lines establish an introspective tone, using "Hauntingly" to suggest a lingering, perhaps even unsettling, influence of music on the speaker's life. The enjambment and short lines create a fragmented rhythm, which mirrors the poem's thematic focus on rhythm and tempo.
The poem employs music as a metaphor for navigating life's challenges, particularly in the lines about fighting the tempo and pace. The transition from external rhythm to internal struggle is clear, especially when addressing anger and the effort to suppress it. However, the poem could benefit from more concrete imagery or specific examples to ground these abstract concepts. For instance, describing a particular moment when music altered the speaker's mood could make the emotional stakes more vivid.
The final stanza shifts to a broader assertion about freedom and self-actualization. The phrase "the things that he or she likes" is somewhat generic and could be strengthened by more precise language or by specifying what those "things" are. Additionally, the use of "he or she" introduces a distancing effect; choosing a more direct or inclusive phrasing might enhance the poem's immediacy.
Overall, the poem's structure reflects its content, but greater specificity and attention to imagery could deepen its impact. The central metaphor is clear, but further development would help distinguish the poem's voice and perspective.
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Lavender
3 months 3 weeks ago
The Art of Being!
Hello, John,
I agree - music is inspiring. Can pull you out of darkness and help move you through hard times. Wise words!
Thank you,
L
Geezer
3 months 3 weeks ago
When I read this...
I immediately thought of a street musician that appears on FB and Tic Toc. He plays guitar and asks people to sing with him. His name is Reggie and after someone sings with him, he asks them "How do you feel, now that you have sung today? Every time, they answer: " I feel great, I feel good." Check him out! Happy New Year to you, keep listening to the music and Neo. ~ Geez.
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Obadiah Grey
3 months 2 weeks ago
Ah. Now I know your name,,,,…
Ah. Now I know your name,,,, you are a, John!
So much scope in "The art of being"
Not too keen on the formatting, but if you like it, then make it yer own bro.
Enjoyed,
Obi.
John Leslie O'Kelley
3 months 2 weeks ago
Obadiah Grey
I've always enjoyed what you've written, you are really one of a kind!