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Jan 09, 2026
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Birthdays
One year the kids made a photo mosaic,
a diary from warmness to winter’s decaying:
the feeding milk bottles and reading daft stories,
my hair set in bobbles, the family guffawing;
teaching the beautiful game in the garden,
patiently building sandcastles and snowmen;
watching barbarians ruin my labours
as youngsters mutated to surly teenagers.
Now my dark locks are whitened and hidden;
that worshipping congregation has risen
as if all sins were forgot or forgiven
and I a declining church or religion,
desirous of presence and shows of devotion,
receiving lip-service and standard gift tokens.
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Comments
Geezer
3 months 2 weeks ago
Yeah...
It sucks when your grandfather duties expire
and you are left feeling alone.
Then just when you start to enjoy it,
the little brats all come back and interrupt your plans of
Friday Night Fights and a few of the boys over with some booze and cards.
Tough break, Dude, think I met you at Scrooge's party a while ago. ~ Geezer.
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Lavender
3 months 2 weeks ago
Birthdays
Hello, Ray,
Good to see your work!
I really like the near rhyme and rhythm in this. The flow enhances the sense of time passing, memories created, both trials and pleasures.
A raw piece, especially the last two lines.
Happy Birthday, if this is written recently.
Thank you,
L
Ray Miller
3 months 1 week ago
Birthdays
Thanks both.