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GREEDLAND IS MINE!
THOSE GREENLANDERS ARE NOT VERY NICE
IF THEY THINK THEY HAVE TROUBLE WITH "ICE"
LET THEM SEE WHAT'S IN STORE
WHEN I SEND THEM SOME MORE!
NOT A "WAR", JUST "DEFENCE" FOR A PRICE.
I'LL RESERVE THEM A SMALL PIECE OF LAND
CALL IT TUNDRA...OH, WON'T IT BE GRAND?
THERE'LL BE NOTHING TO FEED'EM
BUT AT LEAST THEY'LL HAVE FREEDOM
MY NEW GREED-DOM, JUST LIKE I PLANNED!
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Not sure about the assonance in the warped words: and the meter is off in L1...Any suggestions/ improvements are always welcome! Cheers
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
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