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Mar 14, 2026
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'72 El Camino
Lying on the beach with her,
looking up at the night sky,
the rusted chrome bumper
on our car above in the lot
seemed farther away
than the stars in Orion’s belt.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Geezer
1 month 1 week ago
I truly appreciate...
a night such as that! I remember a couple really special ones... but chrome fender? I'm trying to picture that; bumper yeah, but fender? Beside all that, this piece is very good for its economy of words yet losing none of the intensity of the moment. ~ Geez.
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Michael Anthony
1 month 1 week ago
Oops! Good catch, Geez -…
Oops! Good catch, Geez - thanks. Editing now!