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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
May 26, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

“My Heart”

My heart breaks, for your adoration
My heart yearns, for your admiration
These arms are too short, to reach your heart

I think about you all the time
I imagine we are as one, making love to Roy C’s “I’ll always love you”
And dancing to Isaac Hayes “Stand Accused”

One day, I look to see your face appear in my presence
I sense, I will melt leaving a stain on the floor
Just like the wicked witch of the west

But for now, I sing R. Kelly’s, “If I could turn back the hands of time”
Wishing to have said the right words that would have brought you to me
I fell from grace that faithful day hoping to be your baby, forever more

My heart breaks, for your adoration
My heart yearns, for your admiration
These arms are too short to reach your heart

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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Comments

Rottiestyl

Rottiestyl

14 years 1 month ago

I sense, I will melt leaving

I sense, I will melt leaving a stain on the floor - love this line. How many of us have simply wanted to dissipate into nothing when loosing a love. Very descriptive line. I only see one thing that really stands out that I feel needs to be corrected, in the line: My arms is too short, to reach your heart, both in the first and last stanza, it would read better " My arms are too short, to reach your heart" or " These arms are to short....., just my opinion. I rarely change anything in my work so if it works as is for you, then I would leave it. Still, I enjoyed the read.

Kim
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Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

14 years 1 month ago

Thanks Kim

I appreciate the suggestion. I made the changes and I agree it sounds better.

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

14 years 1 month ago

Thanks vexation

I agree Kim suggestion is better. The changes have been made. I like the way it flow better

R

raj

14 years 1 month ago

Barbara

As I read through the lines, it gave a sensation of ripples forming at the drop of a pebble...

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

14 years 1 month ago

Thanks raj

sensation of ripples forming at the drop of a pebble :) glad you enjoyed it. It's not my usual style of writing. I thought I might take a stab at it. I am glad it turn out so well.

L

Lenny of Cohen

14 years 1 month ago

Hauntingly

admirable piece of writing which took me back in time and left me stranded on an island of despair!

Namaste,

Lenny