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Victorclaude
Victorclaude
Nov 19, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

waiting for it

platitudes, ah platitudes. . .
paucity of penury

when not enough
is too much

non-existent forgiveness
lines road to somewhere

all signs point
to

pot of gold --
more than wrong

clandestine advertiser's slick
fleece fools

waiting in line for it
anticipation is killing them

hyperbole notwithstanding
they wait and wait.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Country/Region: USA

Favorite Poets: Wallace Stevens, D. H. Lawrence, Charles Bukowski, Bob Dylan, Leonard Cohen, Henry Wadsworth Longfellow, Percy Bysshe Shelley, T. S. Eliot, E. E. Cummings, Emily Dickinson, William Butler Yeats, Pablo Neruda, Joni Mitchell, William Shakespeare, Basho, Elizabeth Barrett Browning, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Kelly Marie Hayner, Susan Wydville. D. Phillip Caron, Elizabeth Bishop.

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Comments

Race_9togo

Race_9togo

14 years 8 months ago

Victor...

this is one of those little poems that I have to read several times because so much is packed in so little words.
I agree with Lonnie, I can feel distinct irony running through each word.
I think one of the most difficult things in poetry is finding that place where what is written is so much more than just the words and lines.
This to me is a good example of that quality found.
An excellent write.