THE UNSEEN PAINS

Hurting pains sometimes manifest in anger
With distorted contour and crooked face
Voice tone in high rise explodes like bomb
Part of pains flow out in dissipated stress
The wound heals, the scar remains unseen

This painful effect conscious of the cause
The wound deepens, healing hard and slow
Rage degenerates into grudge and malice
Eats up the host till nothing is left inside
Cadaver disintegrates and awaits interment

Pains of the oppressed and down trodden
Lonely moments of misplaced adoration
Faith and trust, betrayed by empty promises
The innocent framed up in bogus charge
Are some of the unseen pains of all times

About This Poem

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About the Author

Country/Region: NGA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by an article in an old manuscript , It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics

Comments

t. reflexion

14 years 1 month ago

Thank you Ian T

You have really done so much for me. I am beginning to see the gaps and also making attempt to fill them. One day, may be, I will stand out to tell the world how you picked up a rough diamond and polished it to become a glittering treasure. I appreciate your support, best wishes.

t. reflexion

14 years 1 month ago

My adorable friend...

and the eyes I do not have, thank you. My works are full of infelicities and I depend on you to point them out for me. I do not know what I will do without you. Please, always be there for me. Thank you very much and best wishes.

t. reflexion

14 years 1 month ago

Thanks

He who dislikes being corrected may never grow and our people say, the one who thinks he knows all, will carry shit on his back, unknown to him and show off.

t. reflexion

14 years 1 month ago

Actually...

I am one of them. Thank you too for understanding the sting in our society.Best wishes.