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The ballad of a windy Spring
Oh wind with your mighty fists,
who speaks of frozenness;
who sleeps inside her throat,
the singer's voice melts the iron
inside my bones,
melts it into a river of faces,
long ago.
Oh wind who whispers broken syllables
through young-green leaves,
weaving at unseen stars:
poets of the past, hanging bright
in their next season;
a slow waltz inside a galactic dream,
or perhaps a plot of demons.
Oh wind who moves graciously
inside tulip's hungry mouths;
whose blood did they drink,
to obtain their reddish colours?
What fires ignite your pen, what inks
drop from your loomy tongue?
About This Poem
Last Few Words: A repost.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Nevel
14 years 1 month ago
hmmm, you might be right
hmmm, you might be right about the last two lines, plural is better.
Thank you for your comment, Ian
greetings,
Erwin
Nevel
14 years 1 month ago
lol, maybe more people will
lol, maybe more people will discover their "inner poet"!
Erwin
scribbler
14 years 1 month ago
hi Nevel
I really enjoyed reading this.Stanza 2 is in my opinion not just the heart but the soul of this poem. !st stanza is a bit unclear in message to me, but I'm sure you will "fix" it better than I could...............scribbler PS almost forgot to say I really loved the imagery