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SPRING SUCKER FISH
It is mid spring as I drive by
this clear and tumbling foot hills creek
and stop before the bridge so high
dismount my truck to take a peek
This stream which many call a river
runs to white descending waters
as if it is afraid to dither
on its way to final resting quarters
Now is the time which in riffles run
above the heads of quiet pools
white sucker fish spawning in the sun
they lay stacked up like utter fools
There they are as I expected
nose to tail in shallows lit by sun
so close they seem almost connected
is spawn begun or nearly done?
I watch them hold from shaded shore
lined with laurels, oaks and birch
while I listen to the rapids' score
music played within this sylvan church
I guess I could go get a spear
and gig as many as I wish
but, instead, I'll just remain right here
too many bones in sucker fish
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
faithmairee
14 years 1 month ago
I Love It
Dear Stan-I've really missed reading you. I never thought I could ever love a poem about fish but I love this. Great diction and use of imagery.
Love-Fatith
scribbler
14 years 1 month ago
hi Faith
I guess a poet can write on any subject. Not being a poet myself, even I attempt the same lol.............stan
scribbler
14 years 1 month ago
hello
I have always lingered around water, even when far from it. Appreciate the visit.............stan
wesley snow
14 years 1 month ago
I could say...
No really, I could say...um...This is a marvelous sojourn into the subtle realities that continually slip away from us only to return, suddenly, in a truth so striking, so utterly bound up in its...um...truthiness it leaves us pondering again the aquatic ...truthiness'es.
Or, that there really are too many damn bones in a sucker fish.
Gotta say bro, I get a kick outta your poetry on a lot of levels and this isn't even the least.
wesley
scribbler
14 years 1 month ago
hi Wesley
I guess it's better to get a kick out of thank to get kicked out of lol...............stan