faithmairee

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i can not love you more

i can not love you more
than i have loved you
for i have loved you long
and held your love so dearly
in my heart of hearts but now
my eyes have opened
to find my heart in mourning

and when the first bird
sings outside my bedroom window
he sings a sorrowful song
for you have found me lacking
though i can not understand
the how and why of it
and yet my love for you
was gentle and long suffering

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Florida, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Lawrence Ferlinghetti, Edna St. Vincent Millay, Lucille Clifton and Elizabeth Bishop

Comments

faithmairee

14 years 1 month ago

Thank you, Ian

So nice to see you stopped by. Thank you for your comments. I appreciate them.

Love,

Faith

faithmairee

14 years 1 month ago

Thank you so much

Rosi-Thank you for your wonderful remarks. Thank you for being here.

Love,

Faith

Pamela A. Lamppa

14 years 1 month ago

an age old topic that always makes for a poem or two

This is a sad listing of the emotions we go through during any kind of loss. But the good thing is, there is always a never ending supply of love. And we are never lacking - we just haven't quite been discovered yet.

This too shall pass.

Love is an age old topic that always makes for a poem or two.

~Pamela

faithmairee

14 years 1 month ago

Thank you

Thank you for your wonderful remarks and for taking the time to respond to my poem. I really appreciate it.

Love-Faith

Nichole

13 years 8 months ago

Awwww

Sounds as though you have been through heartbreak. I like this poem a lot as well.
Beautifully written, i wish i could write this well. Mine are normally about love, lost love and emotions or animals. I enjoyed this one.

Nichole

faithmairee

13 years 8 months ago

Thank you so much

Nichole, Thanks for your kind words. I appreciate them and thank you for commenting on my heartbreak poem.

Faith

P.S. I just went and read some of your work and think you write quite well yourself.

Nichole

13 years 8 months ago

Awwww

Thank you so much for reading my work.
It was a pleasure reading yours.
Your very welcome for my comments.
And i am very very thankful for your kind PS you left for me.
That meant a lot to me.
Keep up the good writes :)

Nichole

loved

13 years 8 months ago

They say

The concept of grief has changed
In this small poem

GRIEF MODERNISED

Grieve not for my loss
Also do not mourn
Each morn

Just believe me and say
Twas good
I'd loved and lived some day
And
The wind did blow me away
Like a candle of sorts
That’s just by the way.

Grieve not hence for me
From this moment
This day
I beseech you
If you love me
The same way