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t. reflexion
t. reflexion
Jun 11, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

PAINS OF LOVE

Sometimes you read
Of never ending love
Where couple lives
Happily ever after

The odds, submerged
Bitterness overlooked
Frustration and tears
Run down the face

This love sees, not blind
And knows what is right
Alert to ignore the wrong
When feelings overwhelm

Strength of love measured
In kilos by span and weight
Can carry the world, entire
Like Atlas, map on the globe

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About the Author

Country/Region: NGA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by an article in an old manuscript , It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics

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t. reflexion

t. reflexion

14 years 1 month ago

Ian.T

It is OK as long as you are there showing me the way, thanks and peace profound.

tr

t. reflexion

t. reflexion

14 years 1 month ago

I an T

I get the message, but your helper is staring at me, have I taken too much of your time? One again, thank you.

tr