can you hear me cry

inner feelings innocently expressed..what struck me most is the innocence ...

much love..

....i do identifay my self with your cry....
i can ear it very well and if you stil have some comunication problems , i will join
you and will cry together.HE must listen
and must help .is HIS duty.best wishes , itzhak.

Now, how do I say this without sounding like a bitch?

Faith, we all have our views, and the *dark nights of our soul*. So this poem is new in as much as it is you *crying out of your wilderness*.

Now, how about making it your unique experience, in a here-to-fore unheard of poem, an experience that shows rather than words that tell?

~A

Yes, you might conclude you wrote a poem and posted, entitling it "Can you hear me cry". But what if you wrote of something that brought you to your lowest *faith*, testing you, and somehow you managed to rise above it, and wrote THAT as a poem.

That would be taking your *poem* to the next level. Right now, it's been written pretty much in the same manner hundreds if not thousands of times, Marie.

Poetry is all about identifying one's own UNIQUE voice. No one else quite like *y/ours*.

~A

Good Lord, Marie, how could you have extrapolated that I was being hateful?

We see what we want to see, don't we? I was merely asking you to not make a *generic* poem but put your life experience into it, thus making it truly yours...

If you prefer and somehow you see me as being hateful to you, I'll let you get over it, and I won't comment again.

~A

That's a great poem. Just to let you know, i go to church, and i know he hears you every time you cry. He catches each tear you shed in a bottle and keeps it. He loves us very much. I know at times it feels as though he doesn't but the truth is he does. Okay Nichole that's enough lol.

Nichole