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lou
lou

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Uncoil, with gradual breaths
Open your eyes ,refocus,
 twenty twenty vision..

Free
span the breadth
and width , expand.

Laugh, cry, scream 
Let it all out.
Expose yourself to reality.

Free.
span the breadth
and  width,
expand.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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Comments

Bonitaj

Bonitaj

14 years 7 months ago

Loved

this exhortation to BE YOURSELF! Freed up to enjoy it!!
Nice one Lou!
Boni

lou

lou

14 years 7 months ago

Boni

Thanks

Lou

judyanne

judyanne

14 years 7 months ago

everybody need to take this advise....

good write lou

did you notice your line breaks with the repeated stanza?
'span the breadth
and width , expand. '

'span the breadth
and width,
expand.'
did you mean to make them different? just me - i think it looks tidier if they're the same

love and hugs
judy
xxxx