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FLUX
Heat of summer
wrapped in beach towel humidity
and winds that burn
this sun that blisters
their lives in boxes
and I propped up at the bar
the barmaiden charms
and double black russians
and beer
I pack their lives in neat boxes
and packing tape
as if I could fit into a box so tidy
my corners full
my edges perfect
Instead My daughter interrupts
this work last eve' and she
and i sit atop the old archive
#503 steam engine I on the
smokestack welded shut
and she on the steam dome
sitting chatting daddy and daughter
as if all daddies and daughters sit
atop old dead steam trains while
the dusk crawls and the whitecaps
can be seen from our high perch
She has my eyes the wonderful
grey green hue and discusses her
college courses and the town where
I once grew and left Where she and
I toured in her little childs buggy and
then wagon named Erebus
our adventures then
Our adventures now
she bids me adieu at the front of the
"Voy" "old blinky" the winking sign
winks us apart
I still visit #503
saving to climb atop of it only when
my daughter visits
and then we sit astride its running
fenders above the drive wheels
in the lee of the wind to chat
our legs kicking high above
the ground
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Esker
14 years ago
refining the moment
Changes would work well Seren,
thanks Hun! and how are you doing?
Im making it along, I think Neopoet
keeps me going. I think Poetry
is the great passion that stirs so
much awake and alive in my haunted
self
Esker
14 years ago
poets!
I was realizing that everything gets channeled for me
through the right temporal Lobe most of it anyway
a documentary on photographers really woke me up
when the artists were explaining their process and
all I kept thinking was "My God" thats how I think
and docs on Poets similar too This Neopoet grounds
a lot of people this family of wordsmiths I think it
means more to me then Ive considered You are
a great help Seren And a good summer day to you!