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        Jul 02, 2011
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    Oh, Mother
Oh, mother
 Dressed in misery
Your broken spirit
 Darkens the heavens 
 Democracy’s birthplace
 Left in the hands
 Of savages
 That left decency
 Somewhere far away 
Uncertainty dances
 To the sound
 Of shattered
 Dreams
The quiet night
Is woken
 By corruption’s
 Laughter 
Pericles cries
 from his grave
 as Socrates
debates tyranny
Children of tomorrow
 watch parents
  sell their fortunes
 for a piece
of comfort 
ah, I can’t witness
 my mother’s tears
 nor can I hear
 her screams 
oh, mother
 of beauty
 tonight
 you dress
 in a
 mournful black
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Comments
CCfire
14 years 3 months ago
Greece has quite a
Greece has quite a predicament facing her, though far away I know it would weigh heavily on her people far from Europe, it is akin to a mother and child. A child watching as the parent dies within the struggle of government foolishness and a people's rage. You know I already liked this one.
weirdelf
14 years 3 months ago
You probably knew what I would think of this
before I said anything.
Greece's troubles are caused by the world banks, that are attacking it's labor and socialist networks. Without becoming overtly political I really think you need to make clear that Greece is under attack from outside. As it reads it is like the child who can't tell if their mother is a whore or just treated like one.
Wordcrafting excellent.