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Kailashana2
Jul 10, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

corvus delicti

the crow fills the air with dark-winged presence
a black iron fence stands guard
doors and windows open,
life passes through.
we are strangers here
with moments of glory
on battlefields of hope
who can speak of victory
and the injury of loss?
but if the sun rises
turns leaves to gold
on a mid-summer's day,
all there is
will take a bow
and the stage will be lit
from the inside out.

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About This Poem

Last Few Words: Thanks CC, of course, I had to put my own spin on it... ;-)

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Ohio, USA

Favorite Poets: Bokonon: “Let your life be the poem you write”. , I'm still writing.....

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S

scribbler

14 years ago

hi

I ain't gonna analyse this, just give kudos and read it a few more times.............stan

Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

14 years ago

Crow

I loved this one! I didn't care for the very last line, so maybe I do not understand the poem. Great job, thanks for posting

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

14 years ago

Anna

as usual a great poem. i agree with Janice i don't quiet get the last line either.

Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

14 years ago

I think i got,

I think i got this one, but will hold my tongue and come back. Enough to say at the moment, it's another great poem. Love Roscoe

CCfire

CCfire

14 years ago

My thought is only this, if

My thought is only this, if you are going to call it Crow then perhaps it doesn't need 'crow' in the first line as we would reference a metaphor back to the title?

Leonard

Leonard

14 years ago

A highly symbolic poem

Anna - I agree with Yenti and CC, since the title is "crow", it would be better if the first line is without the word "crow". A suggestion would be:

A dark winged presence -

Otherwise I like the way the poem flows - beginning with darkness and ending with light. Optimism perhaps?

Leonard

Leonard

14 years ago

A highly symbolic poem

Anna - I agree with Yenti and CC, since the title is "crow", it would be better if the first line is without the word "crow". A suggestion would be:

A dark winged presence -

Otherwise I like the way the poem flows - beginning with darkness and ending with light. Optimism perhaps?

Leonard

Leonard

14 years ago

Love the symbolism

Anna - I agree with Yenti and CC, since the title is "crow", it would be better if the first line is without the word "crow". A suggestion would be:

A dark winged presence -

Otherwise I like the way the poem flows - beginning with darkness and ending with light. Optimism perhaps?

K

Kailashana2

14 years ago

(((((LEONARD))))!!!!

(((((LEONARD))))!!!!

Good lord, kids, don't you ever read anyone's poetry? Where do you get your ideas as to rules, what should or shouldn't be in the first line? Every read Ted Hughes--there's 10 crow poems here.

http://www.thebeckoning.com/poetry/hughes/hughes.html Not that I ever read much poetry except for the Poetry course I took and the Prophet, before my cosmic consciousness experience... And then every style and form came through in a watershed of poetry and has been coming through ever since. All I had to do was go on line search crow and find these poems by Ted Hughes to prove my point.

There are no *rules* in poetry. It has to come from one's inner light....which, btw, is the key to my last line.

~A

CCfire

CCfire

14 years ago

I don't think any one of us

I don't think any one of us said it was a rule, I just felt it wasn't necessary and why would I want to be like anyone else? lol

K

Kailashana2

14 years ago

Well I am also a Logical

Well I am also a Logical Virgo. What else could I call a poem about the harbinger of *change*?

And I didn't post Ted's poems to be similar or the same, only to prove my point, after the fact, after I had written it. It seems like most folks around here want rules to be followed. lol.

~A

CCfire

CCfire

14 years ago

Seems I have repeated myself

Seems I have repeated myself with no way of repairing it..so I might just hang around someone's roof and see what turns up :P How about the latin for Crow...Corvus? Corvidae being the family genus of them..if my old latin serves me correctly but don't quote me lol