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Trait of the Narrows

After totaling the greater sum
of broken hearts you've caused,

and subtracting when the heart was yours
and your life was quietly paused;

multiplied by every single time
you brought another joy,

and divided by the pure attempts
you took no credit, and was coy;

knowing in your heart of hearts
you know nothing that's for sure,

all the while blindly believing
that love for others is what's pure.

Proudly humble that your actions
have always shown integrity,

boasting only of your blessings
that adorn your legacy.

Giving careful considerations
not to doubt, and not to blame,

or discourage good intentions
expecting others of the same.

I applaud that your existence
could not help but prove your worth,

by showcasing that your essence
promoted folly, glee, and mirth.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Comments

Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

13 years 11 months ago

Your trait is poetry,

Your trait is writing poetry, and in this poem you've nailed it. A very good write. Regards Roscoe...

docmaverick

docmaverick

13 years 11 months ago

Friend, Roscoe....

....You are a genuine gentleman, and a scholar. And there aren't many of us left.
I sincerely appreciate your comments, because you're so careful in passing them out.
Thanx again,
docmaverick.