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Aug 24, 2011
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KORROSHUN
between the hate
between the love
like the dissolved
temporary hearts
melting
in the swallow
these snows
late catching
the grey ghosts
oblique pain wrapped
like a thin chilled
cheater coat
we can be together
as the day falls to night
on old sheets
as a scratched disc
crawls about
thirty three and some
revolutions
we can go around
while snowflakes scratch
the cracked walls
your white teeth taking the
hot ounce of fire from the
glass that sits precarious
atop the clock radio
how your smoke green eyes
lead me like a hazy oasis
our pockets full of freedom
lint and lip balm
the snow falls steady
and the television is talking
about a blizzard
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
13 years 10 months ago
KORROSHUN? Corrosion?
Are you dumbing yourself down?
Yes you are.
Your poetry has lost its transcendent luminousity.
Esker
13 years 10 months ago
Im enjoying my titles
they draw more interest then the works sometimes
and thats my whole fun Its comedy Its light
I love my Jokes and Gags show sight comedy
etc all part of the funkshun
magics02
13 years 10 months ago
Your a lover of poetic words
Esker
You are a lover of words and you are a photographer of a vision that speaks between your lines.
Great stuff funkshun and all:)
Mona
Esker
13 years 10 months ago
sparce seasoning
I have written long drawn out works
but I love the simpler fare the subtle use
and to be honest I dont know as many
words as some I hear people speaking
here in my city and I would give an arm
and eye an ear to be able to articulate with
all their words I love words Poetry
ads graffitti its all about communication
and meaning
and ultimately feeling
Thank You