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lou

Aug 27, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Stain

Stain

Hemlock creeping through my veins.
Limbs numb by degrees .
But my ability to live remains.

Losing everything slashing imperceptibly
no visible mark, or contusions.
successive illusions.

Mental strain unapparent
Internalized, coiled within my guts
Holding on so as not to cause pain

Can't fool or hide from myself,
but no one else can detect
that I am eviscerated.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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Comments

13 years 11 months ago

Xena

Your wee brain did very well LOL !!!

The poem refers to the mental strain caused by medical issues. Glad you liked it. Note to self, must cheer up LMAO !!

Lou

13 years 11 months ago

This touched me deeply.

I believe I know where you are coming from.

Well constructed free verse and an awesome ending

13 years 11 months ago

Jess

Thank you.

Lou