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Aug 29, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

STOLEN GLANCES

Bar me not from gazing on
the form which sets my blood on fire
and has done so for many a year.
Don't reward my gaze with flippant ire
in attempt to quash growing desire.

That mirror you depend on so
only shows a flawed reflection.
It never shows what I behold
when I chance to look in your direction,
stealing a glance of near perfection.

So sit there with your puzzle book.
I'll sit here with note pad on my knee.
With pen in hand and love in heart
let me describe what most don't see
and put it into poetry.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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S

13 years 11 months ago

Ho Rose

Sometimes I'll be sitting around with Susan while she's working on a puzzle of some type and I get caught staring at her . I then get told to stop that lol. This poem is the result...........stan

S

13 years 11 months ago

Hi Rose

Once a poem hits the stream it no longer belongs to the writer and will be interpreted in any way the reader pleases lol. this is as should be. I just put my intent in case you had completely missed my meaning, should have known better..........stan

13 years 11 months ago

A lady poet was recently asked

Future Poet

A lady poet was recently asked
How she managed
To be able to publish her book of poetry
She replied
When I was ten, getting bored,
My mom asked me not to idle,
Then what should I do she asked,
Write a poem
Thereafter she never stopped
And
Today she has published her book of poems
And
Her mom is her publisher, editor and reader.

Best of luck to you,
You are the future potential
Of all poets here

S

13 years 11 months ago

hi loved

I hope Neo can do better than vest future potential in me lol. Thanks for the read and kind comment...........stan

13 years 11 months ago

ue not the future

uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu rrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr the presenttttttttttttt

S

13 years 11 months ago

lol

That would be even worse lmao...............stan

13 years 10 months ago

one small addition

don't steal
but STEEL ..
those lovely glances

S

13 years 11 months ago

Hi Eph

Thank you for coming by and leaving such kind comment. I will give your suggestion serious consideration when I inevitably edit..................stan

S

13 years 10 months ago

Hmm....

I guess it's a good thing when somebody thinks enough of a work to come back with another read and suggestion. Thank you...........stan

13 years 10 months ago

Stan

Let the critique police hunt me down LOL!!

It was simply beautiful

Love Lou

S

13 years 10 months ago

hi lou

There is a warrant out on you lol. Thank you for your kind comment...................stan

S

13 years 10 months ago

Hi Rose

See, I Do use suggestions sometimes lol.............stan

K

13 years 10 months ago

Hi Stan.

Hi Stan.

Poetry is a lover's book of reference....love speaks. It warms my heart to hear your words of love for the woman you married. I'm not that lucky, but I'm fortunate. ;-) .

Much enjoyed this whole thread. Thank you.

~A

S

13 years 10 months ago

Hi Anna

I guess the lucky one is Me...............stan

S

13 years 10 months ago

hi Ian

Thank you, but I can't promise no changes as I'm always tinkering with my stuff. Indeed, a one word change is what brought this poem back to top of stream lol.......stan

S

13 years 10 months ago

hi Lonnie

Thank you for the time to read and leave such kind comment...........stan

13 years 10 months ago

Hey Stan,

I liked this. Not that you needed my comment. You're loaded with fans here.
I still (of course) would have liked a more even meter, but the sum of the poem was comfortable and lovely.
wesley

S

13 years 10 months ago

hi Wes

I'm pleased you enjoyed this. I am not too well versed in technical aspects of poetry yet, so meter slips are probably rampant in most of my stuff. And that also begs the question : Which is more important the ease of read and message delivery, or maintaining strict meter? The masters manage both, but this neophyte only gets it right occassionaly lol...............stan

S

13 years 10 months ago

hi

Thank you Chrys................stan

12 years 9 months ago

AFTER A long time in search of my roses poems

i came across yours Stan
and also found one of my own
shall post it soon
if 24 hours
are not still due

12 years 9 months ago

Stan

To see a rose with feelings
to look at the inside
where the feelings are held tightly
before age unfurls the bloom
Is a beauty that many need
Susan is blessed that you see her so.
This is True Love,
Yours Ian.T

12 years 9 months ago

To see a rose with feelings

how true r u

S

12 years 9 months ago

Hi Ian and loved

Hard to believe this oldie was dug back up lol. Thanks for resurrecting it.................stan

12 years 9 months ago

At times once u dig

u get something unexpected so its a gift

S

12 years 9 months ago

hi loved

Guess you're just lucky you didn't hit a sewer when you were digging lol.............stan

12 years 9 months ago

Stan

They found a king under a car park in Leicester City a few weeks ago.
(Richard the Third).. I think they are now looking for his car but they don't know where to bury him.
My kingdom ended in a car park for the want of a horse of course LMAO
Keep Digging Y'All,
Love you all still, Yours Sparrow

12 years 9 months ago

Stan

Do you think this is now a memorable Poem lol, Take care and keep writing, Yours Ian.T

S

12 years 9 months ago

hi Ian

Almost lmao...................stan