raj

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A Quip

How good are the wings
if we can't feel the wind in our face
how good are the waves
if we can't feel their passion

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

Comments

loved

13 years 10 months ago

I Read it to quip

i shall not comment
lest I make a hat trick
hope you do like it
my tactic

loved

13 years 10 months ago

We Soar,

We Soar,
Well can't help it
Old habits die hard,
In any case
I’m no cricketer,
So what with the hat-trick

We soar into space
Like does Branson
With utmost grace,
He fights a space race,
We fight spatial…

Likewise the ocean across your window,
You view daily
And
The passion of the high tide
Reminds one of the compassion
We experience nightly,

But there is no substitute
To imagination,
As sex, pragmatic,
is the modern fashion,

Take it or leave
It’s left for thee
The wave’s desperation
Surges within me

raj

13 years 10 months ago

Hi Lonnie

thanks for the read ..your comment and your suggestion...much appreciated..

weirdelf

13 years 10 months ago

I am reminded of

William Blake - Auguries of Innocence

"To see a world in a grain of sand"

A poet's poem.

And you know I like them short [grins]

raj

13 years 10 months ago

Thanks Jess for your comment.

Thanks Jess for your comment..

scribbler

13 years 10 months ago

hi raj

For some reason I kept wanting to substitute what for how in this enjoyable short poem, but that's just me................stan

raj

13 years 10 months ago

thanks Stan for tickling my

thanks Stan for tickling my mind with your suggestion...ummmmmmmm let's see how it goes...

in fact i had begun writing these lines as a song and then for one reason or another it just didn't take off from there...

loved

13 years 10 months ago

why u did not like

my commments raj

raj

13 years 10 months ago

did i say i didn't like them?

did i say i didn't like them? i didn't..isn't that true?

Candlewitch

13 years 10 months ago

hello raj,

I like this short piece. in few lines you manage to convey both thought and emotion.

always, Cat

raj

13 years 10 months ago

Hi Cat

thank you for the read and your comment...means a lot when you comment...