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themoonman

Sep 11, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

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Meter for everyone!

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Straight to the Heart

That is the way, at least, that's what they say.
You know, those folks, with wisdom words so wrong,
while fucking up the words to every song,
because they just can't leave well enough alone.

trochaic attempt;

That’s the way, at least, that is what is said.
Knowing folks, with wisdom words so wrong,
fucking up the lines in every single song,
all because they can’t leave any thing untouched.

I've already gone over this with Jess, and I failed
miserably at my conversion attempt, but feel I've
definitely learned something about meter.

thanks again for the push Jess, I'm enjoying this!

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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13 years 9 months ago

double post

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13 years 9 months ago

And you thought you couldn't do it.

That is/ the way/, at least,/ that's what /they say./

You know,/ those folks,/ with wis/dom words/ so wrong/

they fuck /up the words /to ev/ery song,

just can't /leave well /enough/ alone.

Not too bloody bad eh!

2 lines of iambic pentameter

2 of iambic tetrameter

Just line 3 would be perfect, metrically, without up.

13 years 9 months ago

parfait monsiuer!

Now let's see those trochees trotting onwards

First one foot and then another strongly

We will soon be seeing coming from you

meter like a charging bull on acid!

13 years 9 months ago

I hear everything [evil laugh]

now you know you are better than you give yourself credit for. Why fuss about pent? You know it means 5. Iambic pentameter, 5 iambs per line.