raj

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Raindrops

Droplets of rain dancing on a lake
ripples caressing the shores,
Mother nursing her sleeping beauty
weaning her with sacred love

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

Comments

raj

13 years 9 months ago

Thank you Lonnie for the read

Thank you Lonnie for the read and your comment which is always welcome..

raj

13 years 9 months ago

thank you for the read and your comment...i am happy to note that you have connected so well with story which unfolds with those four lines wherein i have perceived the raindrops as drops of elixir of life and love which Mother (Nature) feeds her baby (lake) and the ripples as expression of gratitude and warmth the child feels for the Mother...

I would love to read the story you said you are in the process of writing on raindrops or some similar theme..

raj

13 years 9 months ago

Hi Rosi

thank you very much for the read and for your comment...much appreciated...

magics02

13 years 9 months ago

Hello Ocean of Raj

I come back to this one a couple of times and it is only for the first word that is not sticking to me for some odd reason or other. Droplets of rain

Droplets - I need to go check that out more. I know you have some deep metaphors going on in here as in also:

Mother nursing and weaning her ( her is the river correct?) A nice trickle down the river with it. I will be back to read once again.

Hugs to you
Mona

I am back that soon. Droplet is little drop and there is also driplets.. hmmm thinking still

raj

13 years 9 months ago

Hello Mona

thank you for the time to read this one...good to know it engaged you to read it a couple of time...please read my response to the comment of dear Ian and you will know the theme as well as how i perceived those raindrops falling on a serene lake...

magics02

13 years 9 months ago

Yes

I did read your implications and know that is what I thought but I am still stuck on droplets..I guess I will just have to get over it. lol consider it done and very nice short write you have here Raj. Nice to be able to read you once again.

Blessings
Hugs
Mona

raj

13 years 9 months ago

Thank you once again Mona...

Thank you once again Mona... i don't know why you are getting stuck at "droplets" it's a very common word....

much love and hugz..

magics02

13 years 9 months ago

It is just me

Not to worry about it just saying.. I guess I do not hear it much that is all. Poem is nice honey smile now:) Mona

magics02

13 years 9 months ago

Ian

I would not have seen your message to me here if I did not visit back to Raj's poetic write. No I did not say neither droplets is a hardish word as I know what it means also. I just read it in a different light at the time but all is well with droplets like the dew causes the droplets on a rose.

Raj dancing with this one. Smiles

Mona

raj

13 years 9 months ago

Hi Mona

keep dancing on your feet like raindrops
drenching your soul in joy
swing to the beats of the song
of a serenading heart

Candlewitch

13 years 9 months ago

Dear raj,

You have said alot with so few lines. Very deep yet simple. Loved the imagery.

always, Cat

raj

13 years 9 months ago

Thank you Cat for your

Thank you Cat for your appreciative comment...these days i am trying to shorten the length and express more...from the comments it is good to know that i am succeeding in achieving these objectives...

raj

13 years 9 months ago

Dearest JayCee

thank you for the read and your comment...much appreciated...

judyanne

13 years 9 months ago

xxxx

i haven't read any other comments
i want to feel what i get here, and it may not be what you meant... sorry if that is the case :)
awesome raj
i absolutely love the first line
- the imagery of droplets of rain falling on the lake... then the comparison with the human child being weaned...
much food for thought in this small write...
well done
love jujdy

raj

13 years 9 months ago

Judyanne

thank you for the read and your comment...i don't know what you meant by "i want to feel what i get here, and it may not be what you meant... sorry if that is the case :)" but i can tell you for sure that you connected spot on with the theme and the comparison ....nice to know you liked it...

Candlewitch

13 years 8 months ago

Dear Raj,

Are you okay?

Thinking of you!
always, Cat

raj

13 years 8 months ago

Dearest Cat

thank you for inquiring about me and for your concerns...i am fine..just a bit extra busy at work...yet i do drop in regularly at Neopoet and read the writes of others and coment on them even though i have not been posting anything in recent times...

thank you once again for expressing your concerns ..it shows that Neopoet is a community where members care for each other...