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Snowglobes of C-rae

Cool, Cheshire nights
following extraterrestrial days at the walk-in cinema;
to a day where you said to bet a horse named, "Five, daddy, five"!

Which all wouldn't have been possible
if it weren't for the collapse
of a long discarded picket fence
that watched you learn to walk.

I shared that fence with a girl I thought I knew
or wanted very much to have a shot at trying to
understand.

But, my point is this;
we two shared the brightest neon glow that "true magic" has to offer !

You and I made that spark
and it lit up a place in our universe
that never before had seen the light of day.
A place we can say we've been to;

and, only we can really ever go there
because we know the way
and can revisit it any time we choose.

Sure that's only one out of my entire collection of snowglobes.
But, I wouldn't trade that one
for all of the USDA red meat, in the world !

You see? I've started another snowglobe,
and the only correct thing for me to do,
was say that, so as to include.......you.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

13 years 6 months ago

hello,

favorite lines:

You and I made that spark
and it lit up a place in our universe
that never before had seen the light of day.
A place we can say we've been to;

always, Cat