IT WAS A DREAM - 1

I saw a monster whose face was blank
With all my strength I tried to run
Something held my legs and dragged them along
Every step was hard a task to do
A witch flew with spells across the sky
I stumbled and began to crawl
Crawling was not easier either
How to escape was all I could think
Each move brought the monster closer
What was that? I turned to look
There it was in changing mode
A strange looking mountain gorilla
An elephant in a human form
A formless entity with all our fears
It was really hard to tell
My heart beat faster and faster
I had no idea of what to do
Summed up courage and made a dash
I found myself staring into the dark silent night
Wondering what that was all about
Do not worry
I consoled myself
It was just a dream

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: NGA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by an article in an old manuscript , It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics

Comments

Candlewitch

13 years 6 months ago

Hello,

That was some wild ride your poetry took me on! Intense to the end!

Summed up courage and made a dash
I found myself staring into the dark silent night
Wondering what that was all about
Do not worry
I consoled myself
It was just a dream

always, Cat

t. reflexion

13 years 6 months ago

some nights...

it is just a screen of nightmares but I have been told, no dream is bad, thanks and best wishes.